Replace passive voice with active
- The game was won by Denise → Denise won the game
- It was reviewed by the team → The team reviewed it
- If concerns can’t be resolved by your actions → If you can’t resolve concerns
- As required under Section B, Part 5, you must → Section B, Part 5 requires you to
- Funding toward the purchase of your benefits is provided in the form of flex credits → Use flex credits to buy benefits
Activate gerunds
Gerunds are verbs that end in -ing.
- Assessors help with evaluating and setting up workstations → Assessors help evaluate and set up workstations
- This is the most commonly used method of assessing → This is the most common way to assess
- When making decisions on the hiring and retention of → When you decide to hire or retain
- It details procedures for handling → It explains how to handle
Use verbs
- The board has oversight responsibility for → The board oversees
- Submit your application → Apply
- Make a modification → Change
- Directors have the obligation to → Directors are obliged to
Cut unnecessary connectors
- To be able to record → To record
- Interviews are typically done face to face → Interviews are typically face to face
- Surveys are used to assess → Surveys assess
- The work of your colleagues → Your colleagues’ work
- Complete all of the required information → Complete the required information
- You have 60 days to make updates → You have 60 days to update
Avoid noun clusters
- Don't write: The training program evaluation review team will submit its final report in September
- Write: An evaluation of the training program will be available in September
Don’t state the obvious
- Don't write: BC Stats also provides an opportunity to submit written comments at the end of the survey
- Write: BC Stats invites comments at the end
Avoid editorializing
Watch for biased language.
- Don't write: The Work Environment Survey (WES) is a valuable tool used in the BC Public Service to measure employee engagement. It also provides you with an opportunity to contribute confidential feedback about your work environment
- Write: The Work Environment Survey (WES) measures employee engagement. It also lets you give confidential feedback about your work environment
Short sentences
Break two-subject sentences into single-subject sentences.
- Don't write: BC Stats reviews the questionnaire each cycle to ensure questions are valid and reliable, and balances making improvements with maintaining year over year comparability
- Write: BC Stats reviews the questionnaire each cycle to make sure questions are valid and reliable. BC Stats balances improvements with year-to-year comparability
Use the imperative
- You should verify that coverage is effective → Verify that coverage is effective
Avoid redundancy
- Various options → Options
- Are different depending on → Depend on
- And also → And
- Skills and abilities → Skills
- Planning for the future → Planning
Choose the simplest words and phrases
- Accommodation → Housing
- Administer → Do
- Advance planning → Planning
- After this is accomplished → Then
- Assistance, support → Help
- At an early date → Soon
- Communicate with staff → Let staff know
- Gives you the opportunity to → Lets you
- In accordance with → According to, in line with
- In addition to → Plus, and
- In the absence of → Without
- In order to → To
- In the event of → If
- Individual → Person
- Implement → Use
- Is able to → Can
- Method → Way
- Obtain → Get
- Prior to → Before
- Provides you with the opportunity to → Lets you
- Request → Ask
- Require assistance → Get help
- Result in → Cause, make, lead to
- The amount of time that → How long
- To be used in → For
- Within your ability → If you can